Haiku challenge. Your day in three lines 7-5-7

Zoffiel
Zoffiel Member Posts: 3,374 ✭
edited February 2018 in General discussion
Eclipse as light becomes dark
Metaphor for change
The crickets stop then sing again.

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  • SoldierCrab
    SoldierCrab Member Posts: 3,430 ✭
    Sad clouds eclipse the eclipse
    Balancing gently onwards
    Breezes cool refreshing all.


    Not sure if I did it correct Zoffiel

  • Zoffiel
    Zoffiel Member Posts: 3,374 ✭
    Close enough,  @soldiercrab Thank you
    This format is seven syllables, then five then seven. Sort of, give or take some oriental calculations that don't translate to English.
    We can say so much in so few words. If we try. Marg
  • Sister
    Sister Member Posts: 4,961 ✭
    Beginning still and silent
    Melancholy pain
    Excitement of homecoming.

    Uggh - been awhile since I've tried something like that.

  • SoldierCrab
    SoldierCrab Member Posts: 3,430 ✭
    @Afraser
    what a great haiku...  its ok to have one of those days 

    hugs 
  • SoldierCrab
    SoldierCrab Member Posts: 3,430 ✭
    Travel the Highway
    Wait in line
    Released from Neuro  YEAH !!!
  • Zoffiel
    Zoffiel Member Posts: 3,374 ✭

    moving through the aches and pains

    goosebumps rise soft breeze

    days plans run like the river

  • jennyss
    jennyss Member Posts: 2,084 ✭
    Strong enough to mop the floor
    Now watching blue wrens
    While spider webs wait their turn
  • kmakm
    kmakm Member Posts: 7,974 ✭
    I love a haiku!

    I wrote one when I found out I had to do chemo. It's bleak and has the f word in it. Probably not the best thing to put in this forum...

    So projecting forward for today:

    I wouldn't lose my temper
    When I ice the cake
    On not enough sleep, would I?!
  • Zoffiel
    Zoffiel Member Posts: 3,374 ✭
    Easy to lie here and think
    Harder to get up
    That cake won't ice itself, girl.
  • kmakm
    kmakm Member Posts: 7,974 ✭
    Ha ha! Actual lols here @zoffiel!

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