Haiku challenge. Your day in three lines 7-5-7

ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,943
edited February 3 in General discussion
Eclipse as light becomes dark
Metaphor for change
The crickets stop then sing again.

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  • SoldierCrabSoldierCrab Bathurst NSW Member Posts: 2,385
    Sad clouds eclipse the eclipse
    Balancing gently onwards
    Breezes cool refreshing all.


    Not sure if I did it correct Zoffiel

  • ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,943
    Close enough,  @soldiercrab Thank you
    This format is seven syllables, then five then seven. Sort of, give or take some oriental calculations that don't translate to English.
    We can say so much in so few words. If we try. Marg
  • SisterSister Adelaide Hills, SAMember Posts: 2,075
    Beginning still and silent
    Melancholy pain
    Excitement of homecoming.

    Uggh - been awhile since I've tried something like that.

  • SoldierCrabSoldierCrab Bathurst NSW Member Posts: 2,385
    @Afraser
    what a great haiku...  its ok to have one of those days 

    hugs 
  • SoldierCrabSoldierCrab Bathurst NSW Member Posts: 2,385
    Travel the Highway
    Wait in line
    Released from Neuro  YEAH !!!
  • ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,943

    moving through the aches and pains

    goosebumps rise soft breeze

    days plans run like the river

  • jennyssjennyss Western NSWMember Posts: 284
    Strong enough to mop the floor
    Now watching blue wrens
    While spider webs wait their turn
  • kmakmkmakm MelbourneMember Posts: 3,901
    I love a haiku!

    I wrote one when I found out I had to do chemo. It's bleak and has the f word in it. Probably not the best thing to put in this forum...

    So projecting forward for today:

    I wouldn't lose my temper
    When I ice the cake
    On not enough sleep, would I?!
  • ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,943
    Easy to lie here and think
    Harder to get up
    That cake won't ice itself, girl.
  • kmakmkmakm MelbourneMember Posts: 3,901
    Ha ha! Actual lols here @zoffiel!
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