Haiku challenge. Your day in three lines 7-5-7

ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,171
edited February 3 in General discussion
Eclipse as light becomes dark
Metaphor for change
The crickets stop then sing again.

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  • SoldierCrabSoldierCrab Bathurst NSW Member Posts: 1,636
    Sad clouds eclipse the eclipse
    Balancing gently onwards
    Breezes cool refreshing all.


    Not sure if I did it correct Zoffiel

  • ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,171
    Close enough,  @soldiercrab Thank you
    This format is seven syllables, then five then seven. Sort of, give or take some oriental calculations that don't translate to English.
    We can say so much in so few words. If we try. Marg
  • SisterSister Adelaide Hills, SAMember Posts: 324
    Beginning still and silent
    Melancholy pain
    Excitement of homecoming.

    Uggh - been awhile since I've tried something like that.

  • onemargieonemargie queenslandMember Posts: 744
    Wow that’s quite spiritual @zoffiel

    Take each day as it happens
    Keep eyes on the prize
    See the bright light at the end 

    there you go lol!!!

    margie x
  • steplightlysteplightly Gold CoastMember Posts: 111
    Seasons following seasons; None step out of line; Stepping lightly hour by hour
  • SoldierCrabSoldierCrab Bathurst NSW Member Posts: 1,636
    @Afraser
    what a great haiku...  its ok to have one of those days 

    hugs 
  • SoldierCrabSoldierCrab Bathurst NSW Member Posts: 1,636
    Travel the Highway
    Wait in line
    Released from Neuro  YEAH !!!
  • ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,171

    moving through the aches and pains

    goosebumps rise soft breeze

    days plans run like the river

  • Jane_ElizabethJane_Elizabeth Member Posts: 131
    The slow creep of dust persists
    Folding all in fug
    Housework slouches on, anon.

  • jennyssjennyss Western NSWMember Posts: 74
    Strong enough to mop the floor
    Now watching blue wrens
    While spider webs wait their turn
  • ZoffielZoffiel Regional VictoriaMember Posts: 1,171
    edited February 2
    Quiet pleasure reading replies
    Glimpses of shared life
    Unity in trial and pleasure
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